Good Prologue? (Part 1)?

The Rrrr I growled part should just b "I growled" and the blood pulsing through your ears is really effective. It is in 1st person which makes it more personal, and say shards of rock not rock shrapnel, because the sound of the word shards is more related to smashing gl, and shrapnel is more war, which might be what you're going for... but still. It's really good!